My Dialogue Sucks: Tips For Improving Dialogue In Your Novel

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I have just submitted the first few chapters of my thriller novel, Pentecost to my writing group for critique. The responses have been great on plot but truly, my dialogue sucks! (and I am using the English spelling before everyone starts sending me typo notices)

So here are some articles and links that I have been reading to try and improve my dialogue so hopefully they will help you too.

  • Dialogue is not conversation” from Robert McKee ‘Story‘. Conversation is boring, repetitive and concerns inane things. Dialogue moves the plot along, reveals character and every word is necessary to advance the story. As Alfred Hitchcock said, ‘a good story is life with the boring bits taken out'.
  • Very few writers get away with writing in dialects, (think Irvine Welsh) but for most readers it is very annoying and disturbs the flow of reading so don't do it.
  • Dialogue breaks up monotony of paragraphs of exposition/description and makes the story move faster (JA Konrath). It is better to reveal story elements in dialogue than exposition. It should be natural, but not too natural (as above, it is NOT real conversation). Avoid adverbs and dialogue tags where possible i.e. Jill said wryly. Reading it aloud helps.
  • On attribution and dialogue tags from Let The Words Flow. He said/she said is needed but not every line which can be distracting. But be careful of the opposite extreme so the reader loses sense of who is speaking.
  • Dialogue should reveal emotion through words, not through adverbs. Don't say “angrily” when you can use angry words and describe the character/action portraying anger. (Show, don't tell!). From Blood Red Pencil.
  • Don't use dialogue to explain the back story, saying things like “As you know John, we have already navigated the lost world of Aurion and found the golden goblet…” . From Poewar, which also has some great exercises for dialogue.
  • For a brilliant chapter on dialogue, read “How not to write a novel” which parodies the author who is too good for the word ‘said, as well as examining misplaced exposition, random adverbs, failure to identify the speaker and more in a laugh-out-loud writing book.
  • My primary flaw seems to be that my readers don't think my character would talk the way I have written, so my dialogue does not match the person created in the reader's head. This is good in a way as I have evoked a specific character in their minds, but bad as I have clearly got the ‘voice' wrong! Holly Lisle's advice helps here, “writing good dialogue comes from being able to hear voices in your head that aren't there“, and the voices have to belong to the specific characters. I am planning to read my chapters out loud and rectify the issues. I am still on first draft so I am not fretting too much but dialogue is one of the areas that has stopped me writing so I want to continue learning about it.

Do you have any tips for writing dialogue? Or any good examples in books I could read?


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  • A key point to remember is that real people don't speak using perfect grammar. They run words together, mix up tenses, interrupt each other and don't finish sentences. People use contractions, stuffer, and stumble over words. The absolute easiest way to make your characters believable and real is to make their dialogue believable and real. The dialogue has to sound like real people speaking to one other the way they would in real life.
    Even dialects can be accomplished if you speak in a dialect - just listen closely to yourself (or someone you know) and write what you hear. It's not easy, but it adds dimension to the characters and to the dialogue.
    Each character should have his/her own set of speech idioms which makes recognizing speakers easy for the readers. Example: if a child stutters, he should be the only one of your characters who stutters. Make it part of the Character Chart you've prepared for each of your characters. Get a Character Chart at http://bit.ly/cuNP4s - it can be modified to suit your needs, and is copyright-free.

  • An novelist knows what to do when he gets suppressed the ideas of yours could also help an novelist to get bloom again if they use it in an proper way to utilize them properly.

  • Great tips, Joanna. Dialogue tends to be my strong suit, but when it fails, it's usually for one of two reasons: (1) the dialogue serves a plot purpose rather than a character purpose; or (2) male dialogue sounds too feminine.
    If you find that the dialogue isn't in the voice of the character, ask yourself, are the words coming from the character, or from the author's need to move the plot in a particular direction? If the latter, look for a character-driven motivation for the speaker to steer the conversation that way, and experiment with different wording to make the dialogue more authentic.
    Keep in mind that men tend to be more direct in their speech than women. So while a woman might ask, "Do you want to go out to dinner tonight?" a man would more likely say, "Let's go out to dinner tonight." That's not to say you can't have a role reversal. But that dynamic should be part of the overall character development, and the dialogue should merely reflect it.

  • I always used to have problems with dialogue - I was so wrapped up in setting the scene and painting a picture for the reader that I forgot to focus on what characters said to each other, and every character ended up talking like me! The best dialogue enhances the character so that you can leave out the attribution tags and readers still know who is talking. I read plays, and decided to put my two film degrees to good use, and studied the way dialogue is portrayed on film. I got a much better grasp of how dialogue works in fiction rather than real life, and now I try to "play a movie" of the scene in my head, and write down what my characters say to each other.

  • I have been told my dialogue is my strong point. When told it gave me a confidence boost. If only I could get my descriptions to work the same way for me.
    I become each character and imagine them chatting. I cannot do this for a field or leafy lane. :)

    Interesting article.

  • Try to avoid two very similar characters talking. I t should be possible to tell who is talking by the language that they use. I have sometimes collected all the speech from each character and run analytical software like reading age and Gender Genie on each seperately. So for instance when one of my characters, in 'Side Effect' who is a professor, is talking to his teenage daughter, he should come up as male on Gender Genie with a high reading age, and the daughter should be female with a reading age several years younger. Things like sentence length and linking words make a big difference.
    See Side Effect to see if you think it works. (http://www.amazon.co.uk/Side-Effect-Like-Falling-ebook/dp/B003VS0DUA/ref=sr_1_2?s=digital-text&ie=UTF8&qid=1314190211&sr=1-2)

  • I love the dialog that Harper Lee gives her characters in "To Kill a Mockingbird". She writes dialog so specific, seldom needs tag lines are needed.

    Give it a read, or a reread. This book helps me every time.

  • What a timely blog. I've committed to writing a dialogue only book and am really struggling! Thank you so much ... as always.

  • Make it sound natural, but not too natural. We often digress when we speak, but if you do this in written dialogue you’ll quickly lose your readers. Essentially, you have to take out the boring bits. Your characters need to stay on topic but sound as though they are conversing naturally.

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