In this short video, I explain how I'm doing my first round of edits on Map of the Impossible, including my process, what I look for in the manuscript, and helpful tips for your self-editing process.
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Transcript of the video on editing
Hello, Creatives. I'm Joanna Penn from TheCreativePenn.com and I am going to start trying to do some more live videos. So this is the first I've done in ages, so I hope you find it useful today.
I'm going to talk a little bit about editing because right now I am starting to edit. I've printed out the first draft and now I need to hand-edit it.
Actually I've got a picture to share with you of some of my hand edits, so I'm just going to put it on the screen. You can see here, I tend to scribble a lot at this stage of the process, and I'm pretty excited about this book.
It is the third in my Mapwalker dark fantasy trilogy, and the other two are done. Doing the third book in a series can sometimes be a challenge especially when they're spaced out a bit, and you're a discovery writer, like me, because you don't necessarily have a plan. You don't necessarily know how it's going to end.
But in this edit, there are a few things that I will be focusing on.
So first of all, I'm doing a full read-through and scribbling on the — Oh, I've actually got it here so you can see — It's in this big folder. So I just print it out and go through it by hand,
I'm looking at what's missing and what might need expanding.
So for example, if I've just missed a whole chunk of information or story about how the characters are behaving, or if I just feel like, ‘Oh, there needs to be something that sets that up beforehand.'
So I'm really writing what I need to add and also what might need expanding. So for example, as I was reading about one of my pyre scenes with one character who died in the last book. I wanted to expand that and make it more emotional in some way.
Also, how does the story hang together? Does it make sense as the trilogy?
That's really important. This really is a trilogy, one character arc, and that will be the next question.
Are all of the character arcs complete? Do they make sense?
Are they strong enough? Do you get a sense of the real characters as opposed to in a thing that might be a cardboard cutout character that's just there to be killed?
That's important. Then also the beginning and the end of the books.
When you open that first scene, do you want to keep reading? Is the ending satisfying both the of the book itself, but also of the whole trilogy?
Then I'm also looking at story order. So I tend to write in scenes — a scene is generally in one place and some characters and something happens — but that's not how I do chapters.
I tend to chop my scenes up so they go across chapters. So there's more of a cliffhanger idea, and that's really important too.
I do my edits with a thesaurus. I go through and if I find repeated words or anything — you know, when you tend to use the same word over and over and it's really annoying, so you have to go in and change it.
So I have that thesaurus open so I can check as I go through. Now, this is not specific line detail edit because I know I'm going to make some more changes, but if I notice things, I'm going to fix them.
[If you want to go to this level, check out my tutorial on ProWritingAid which has a thesaurus and lots of other editing tools.]
Also dialogue. I definitely rewrite a lot of dialogue at this stage, making it more like the character and also making it more realistic and/ or cutting it or changing it or adding action so that you don't need a character tag. Mila or Sienna said — that'll change to some action. Sienna jumped out the window and said as she jumped out, for example.
Also passive to active language. I definitely try and fix that. We all write a lot of passive language. Now. I will fix that also later when I do the line edit stage, but if I notice it, I'm going to fix it here too.
So that's my first big edit. And I actually love this stage a lot. I feel so much closer to the finished book and you can see the cover here. I'm really excited to have that book almost finished.
And the trilogy almost finished because, of course, as writers when we have a trilogy, we can then turn that into a lot more products.
I can do a boxset later in the year or next year. I'm going to get my audiobooks done once I have all three. I haven't been clear on the voice or even whether I would narrate them myself. I don't think I'm going to, I think I'm going to just make sure that I have a good voice to narrate them.
What else? Once I've finished the run-through by hand, I type everything up into Scrivener and then I will print it again and I'll run through it again. But this time at a more detailed level to make sure it reads properly end to end.
Then I send it to my story editor, who is also my first reader, Jen Blood, she's fantastic. She's been my (fiction) editor for years and she does a story read and then comes back to me with notes. I'll do the fixes and then I'll do the line edit or run it through Pro Writing Aid and then I'll send it to my proofreader.
My proofreader is going to then give any thoughts on what else needs to be fixed. Usually just a few things at that stage and after that it gets formatted for print publication.
So at this point, I'm ready to also put the preorder up, and this is something I like to do once I've got that first draft, because I know the book is going to be finished within a couple of months once it goes through all these different people.
So, that is my process. So I hope you found that useful and let me know how your writing is going and also how do you do your edits as a comment below. So I hope that was useful. If you enjoyed the live video, let me know and I will hopefully be doing more of them over time. Right. Bye for now.
Robyn R. Pearce says
Really valuable, thanks Jo. Love to see you as well – keep up the short live clips! 🙂
Hi Joanne. My process is almost exactly the same as yours. I still have trouble finding beta readers though, and don’t know how to solve this one. Enjoyed the short video though and hope you’ll do more on editing. Thanks.
I don’t print out my manuscript but that’s a good idea. I have an editor who looks for repeated words, passive voice, prepositions, and adverbs. She comes up with a huge list for me to correct; maybe she uses software that finds these words. I make big plot changes first.
Colin Coles says
Thanks very much Jenna for succinct edit process. Follow process of print out, but work in tandem with online script. Rewrites and corrections. I’m on my sixth novel, a sequel, and complete a – first re-write of previous day’s work. Mainly, a discovery writer, like you, but two novels have pre- determined plots. Those with plots are easier to write, in my opinion. With discovery novels you’re forever, imagining and re-imagining to get the result you want. A process, which requires much more spontaneity and dedication, than a plot driven novel.
– Your video, is very timely. Just rounding off, a first draft for a sequel novel. You’ve given an idea to go for a trilogy. Like, the idea of a thesaurus, to hand, as a reminder, to catch jar in repeat words. Strike while the iron is hot! Apologies for cliché. Best wishes for your latest novel – Colin. Write as Sam Grant.
Susan Baron says
Thank you for the how-to on self editing. It’s exactly what I need right now. I also need beta readers and my idea is to ask people who are actively writing/publishing to read for me and I will read for them. I haven’t done it yet.
I don’t quite understand what you mean by writing scenes across chapters. Organization is something I really struggle with. I think I write some powerful scenes, but putting them in the right place and order is difficult for me.
Joanna Penn says
I break a scene in the middle across 2 chapters so there is a cliffhanger into the next chapter.
e.g. Finn opens the box and gasps – end of chapter
next chapter – Finn lifts the gold out of the box – so it keeps people reading even though the scene is the same e.g. same character, same place, same time
Sallianne Hines says
I am a discovery writer too and follow a process similar to yours. I do have particular beta readers for various expertise (I had a polo scene so I put the call out for polo experts to verify the authenticity of what I’d written, having never seen a match myself in person), and I also exchange beta reads with a couple of other authors. I am in US and also sell books in Australia and UK so I do have a UK beta I trade reads with so we can exchange cultural/language tips. I also read my book aloud to my dogs and cats (okay, to myself!) which gives a good sense of rhythm and flow so I can fix the awkward stumbling parts. I have also just started using Word’s feature where it reads your book aloud to you. It’s a boring computer voice (can that be adjusted?) but it’s also helpful for flagging things. I listen to it scene by scene while gazing out the window or walking about the room. As an editor myself, I trade edits with other editors and have 2 proofreaders – one earlier on and one for the very end right before I format. I enjoy your videos and thanks for sharing your expertise!